11月17日写作真题参考范文:成功者的素质在大学里学不到吗？

　　2018年11月17日

　 雅思大作文题目

　　

　　"Some people think that the qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or any similar institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

 

　　解析&审题

　　连续两周考的都是很古老的题目，上周重复的是2012年1月14日的考题，而本周则重复了2011年9月3日的题目，距今已经7年多的老题，估计很多同学都没有准备到。本周的题目是：让一个人成功的那些素质，在大学里学不到吗？就这个问题，我们的思路不外乎以下几种：

　　A. 一边倒讨论：完全学得到 / 完全学不到

　　B. 双边讨论：虽然学不到这些素质，但大学有利于人们强化和使用这些素质

　　C. 批判思维：某些素质大学学不到（如自信、勇气等），有些素质则可以学到（人际交往能力，处理问题能力等）。

　　考生可以在以上思维方式中任选一个进行写作。

　　以下是唐老师的高分范文。本范文中，唐老师遵从以上第2个写作方案。首先分析成功者需要哪些素质，然后认为这些素质学校是教不了的，论据有二：其一，很多成功的人大学成绩很差，甚至都没有读完大学；其二，大学成绩好的人，很多结尾都不怎么成功。接着提出大学教育可以帮助人们合理使用他们的天生的素质，从而也有利于他们的成功，结论是大学教育在培养成功的学生方面有价值。

　　请大家认真阅读范文，看唐老师是如何把以上思路落实到具体文字表达的。

　　老师笔记

　　01

　　If we look at those who have achieved success in their own fields today, we will easily find that they are simultaneously ambitious, courageous, resilient and self-confident, among other things. First, ambitious people are willing to take risks, and they will see that they are capable of doing their best and being the best at what they do. Second, many people do not achieve success for lack of courage and this fear of failure is exactly what holds them back. Third, resilience is a key trait for success as it is what can help people to continue going, no matter what adversity they encounter. Fourth, people must trust themselves because without self-confidence, success is simply out of the question.

　　如果我们看看那些近日在自己的领域取得成功的人，我们就会很容易地发现，他们都是有雄心、勇敢、有韧性和自信的。首先，有雄心的人愿意冒险，他们会发现自己有能力尽量把所有事情做到比较好。第二，很多人因为缺乏勇气而没有成功，而这种惧怕失败正是阻碍他们前进的原因。第三，韧性是成功的关键，因为无论遇到什么逆境，它都能帮助人们继续前进。第四，人们必须相信自己，因为没有自信，成功是根本不可能的。

　　解析

　　（1） 本段开门见山，分析成功者的四大特征：雄心、勇敢、韧性和自信，并简要分析各种特征对于成功的重要性。

　　（2） achieve success 取得成功

　　（3） simultaneously 同时地

　　（4） resilient 有弹性的

　　（5） among other things 等等；诸如此类

　　（6） take risks 冒险

　　（7） be capable of... 能够做......

　　（8） adversity 逆境；对手

　　（9） out of the question 不可能的

　　02

　　In my opinion, university is probably not the place for people to learn such qualities as ambition, courage, resilience and self-confidence. As a matter of fact, many successful men and women alive today did poorly in a university. They got low grades or no grades, and many of them had not completed university or even high school. They are simply born with these “success” qualities. On the other hand, many students who have received excellent university education do not turn out to be very successful in life. This amply shows that the university and other similar institutions cannot give people those qualities to make them successful.

　　在我看来，大学可能不是人们学习雄心、勇气、韧性和自信的地方。事实上，许多近日仍健在的成功男女在大学里表现不佳。他们成绩不高或者没有成绩，他们中的许多人都没有完成大学甚至高中学业。他们天生就具备这些“成功”的品质。另一方面，很多受过良好大学教育的学生在生活中并不是很成功。这充分表明，大学和其他类似的机构不能教给人成功的品质。

　　解析

　　（1） 本段主要论述大学无法教会学生成功素质的原因。

　　（2） as a matter of fact 事实上

　　（3） turn out 原来是......

　　（4） amply 充分地

　　03

　　Yet this does not follow that the environment like a university is not helpful at all for the development of those “success” character traits. In fact, through the university experience, people will be better able to get in tune with and therefore make the most of their positive qualities. In this regard, the university and other institutions do have a role to play in making people successful.

　　然而，这并不意味着像大学这样的环境对培养这些“成功”的性格特征毫无帮助。事实上，通过大学的经历，人们会能够更好地遵从，从而很大限度地利用他们的积较好质。在这方面，大学和其他机构在使人成功方面确实可以发挥作用。

　　解析

　　（1） 本段主要大学在培养“成功”素质方面并非完全没有作用。

　　（2） this does not follow that... 这不意味着......

　　（3） character trait 性格特征

　　（4） get in tune with... 与......保持一致

　　（5） make the most of... 充分利用......

　　（6） in this regard 在这方面

　　04

　　In conclusion, although the qualities that are required to succeed cannot be learned at a university or a similar institution, probably they can bestrengthened to some extent. It is, therefore, not appropriate to say that people can achieve success only through university education, or that university education has completely nothing to do with people’s success.

　　总之，虽然成功所需的素质不能在大学或类似的机构中学习，但它们可能会在某种程度上得到加强。因此，说人们只有通过大学教育才能取得成功不合适，或者说大学教育与人们的成功完全无关也不合适。

　　解析

　　（1） 总结前面的主要观点。

　　（2） require 需要

　　（3） strengthen 强化

　　（4） appropriate 恰当的

 

 

　　7分范文

　　

　　If we look at those who have achieved success in their own fields today, we will easily find that they are simultaneously ambitious, courageous, resilient and self-confident, among other things. First, ambitious people are willing to take risks, and they will see that they are capable of doing their best and being the best at what they do. Second, many people do not achieve success for lack of courage and this fear of failure is exactly what holds them back. Third, resilience is a key trait for success as it is what can help people to continue going, no matter what adversity they encounter. Fourth, people must trust themselves because without self-confidence, success is simply out of the question.

　　In my opinion, university is probably not the place for people to learn such qualities as ambition, courage, resilience and self-confidence. As a matter of fact, many successful men and women alive today did poorly in a university. They got low grades or no grades, and many of them had not completed university or even high school. They are simply born with these “success” qualities. On the other hand, many students who have received excellent university education do not turn out to be very successful in life. This amply shows that the university and other similar institutions cannot give people those qualities to make them successful.

　　Yet this does not follow that the environment like a university is not helpful at all for the development of those “success” character traits. In fact, through the university experience, people will be better able to get in tune with and therefore make the most of their positive qualities. In this regard, the university and other institutions do have a role to play in making people successful.

　　In conclusion, although the qualities that are required to succeed cannot be learned at a university or a similar institution, probably they can be strengthened to some extent. It is, therefore, not appropriate to say that people can achieve success only through university education, or that university education has completely nothing to do with people’s success.

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　　建议背诵的句子

　　1. If we look at those who have achieved success in their own fields today, we will easily find that they are simultaneously ambitious, courageous, resilient and self-confident, among other things.

　　如果我们看看那些近日在自己的领域取得成功的人，我们就会很容易地发现，他们都是有雄心、勇敢、有韧性和自信的。

　　2. On the other hand, many students who have received excellent university education do not turn out to be very successful in life.

　　另一方面，很多受过良好大学教育的学生在生活中并不是很成功。

　　3. In fact, through the university experience, people will be better able to get in tune with and therefore make the most of their positive qualities.

　　事实上，通过大学的经历，人们会能够更好地遵从，从而很大限度地利用他们的积较好质。

　　4. It is, therefore, not appropriate to say that people can achieve success only through university education, or that university education has completely nothing to do with people’s success.

　　因此，说人们只有通过大学教育才能取得成功不合适，或者说大学教育与人们的成功完全无关也不合适。

 

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